雅思寫作范文及賞析健康管理的益處

2024-08-07 13:55:56 來源：中國教育在線

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雅思寫作范文及賞析：健康管理的益處

【健康類】：

Staying healthy by playing sports and eating well should be an individuals duty to society rather than a habit for personal benefits. Do you agree or disagree? 保持健康是個人對于社會的責(zé)任，但是，不是使個人受益的良好習(xí)慣，是否認(rèn)同?

相關(guān)提問：

【健康類】：

1. Some people believe that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet， while others believe it is individuals responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 有人認(rèn)為政府有責(zé)任保障人們的健康飲食，有人認(rèn)為健康飲食是個人的責(zé)任，討論兩種觀點，給出你的意見。

2. Some people believe that improving public health should increase the number of sports facilities. But others believe that it has little effects and needs other measures should be taken. Discuss both views and give your own opinion 有人認(rèn)為提高公眾健康應(yīng)該提高體育設(shè)施的數(shù)量，有人這種做法效果有限，應(yīng)該采取其他方式，討論兩種觀點，給出你的意見。(2009年2月28日)

【頭腦風(fēng)暴導(dǎo)言】：

失去你，擁有世界又如何，這個你，就是我們每人的健康管理。每天運(yùn)動一小時，健康工作50年，幸福生活一輩子，這才是我們值得秉承的人生格言。

個人保持健康，提高工作效率，創(chuàng)造社會財富，減少消耗社會醫(yī)療資源，因此，這是履行社會責(zé)任。

贏的五個偏幫部首為：亡、口、月、貝、凡。月字指的就是我們的健康管理，健康，使人精力充沛地應(yīng)對學(xué)業(yè)、事業(yè)的挑戰(zhàn)，樂觀地實現(xiàn)家庭的和諧。財富不能保障健康，健康卻可以創(chuàng)造財富。身心健康，家人無憂，生活快樂，因此，保持使人人受益，是應(yīng)該培養(yǎng)并堅持的良好習(xí)慣。

【文章布局】：

首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場

二段：讓步原題觀點的合理性

三段：反駁原題觀點之不合理

尾段：再次亮明觀點 +(總結(jié)理由)

【作家立場】：保持健康是個人和政府的責(zé)任，但是，個人應(yīng)該承擔(dān)更多的責(zé)任。

【思路拓展】：

為何保持健康是履行社會責(zé)任：

① 保持身體健康是個人履行社會責(zé)任的體現(xiàn)，因為這減少了對于國家醫(yī)療資源的消耗，國家就有財政預(yù)算解決其他民生問題。

② 如果個人的健康沒有保障，難以勝任工作挑戰(zhàn)，亦無法為社會發(fā)展做出應(yīng)有貢獻(xiàn)。相反，健康的公民可以創(chuàng)造社會財富，為國家發(fā)展注入新鮮活力。因此，是個人社會責(zé)任的體現(xiàn)。

為何保持健康是良好的個人習(xí)慣：

① 對于個人的利好：增強(qiáng)自信，減少憂慮，培養(yǎng)樂觀人生態(tài)度。健康者通常為熱愛運(yùn)動者，通過運(yùn)動可結(jié)實好友，這就意味著快樂源泉之增加。

② 對于家庭的利好：可以想象，個人健康狀況令人擔(dān)憂，家人必然痛苦和擔(dān)憂(例如企業(yè)家和文體明星)，因此，個人健康可以使人樂觀地實現(xiàn)家庭的和諧。

③ 對于事業(yè)、學(xué)業(yè)的利好：個人健康可以提高學(xué)習(xí)和工作效率，使人精力充沛地應(yīng)對事業(yè)的挑戰(zhàn)。

【語料庫】：

1. keep fit = remain healthy = stay healthy v 保持健康

2. have a reasonable health management v 有良好的健康管理

3.can instill confidence into ones heart = build up ones self-confidence v 可以增強(qiáng)人的自信

4. strengthens ones immune system v增強(qiáng)人的免疫系統(tǒng)

5. enhance ones health index v提高人的健康指數(shù)

6. Happiness lies，first of all，in health 健康是幸福人生的本源。

7. If citizens can strengthening physical exercise and keep a wholesome dietary habit, then their perfect health index can be maintained. In this sense, it will greatly diminish the consumption of social health medical resources. 如果公民可以加強(qiáng)體育鍛煉，保持健康飲食，他們可以保持良好的健康指數(shù)。從這個意義上講，這會減少社會醫(yī)療資源的消耗。

8. Keeping fit is indispensable factor for improving peoples quality of life 保持健康對于提高人們的生活質(zhì)量而言，是不可缺少的因素。

9. It is unshakable duty of every individual to embark on a healthier lifestyle v開始健康的生活方式, 是人人不可推卸的責(zé)任。

10. Health makes one brave career challenges energetically and harmonize family life optimistically. 健康使人經(jīng)歷充沛地應(yīng)對事業(yè)的挑戰(zhàn)，樂觀地實現(xiàn)家庭和和諧。

【范文賞析】：

{首段}：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場

Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. However, people have been pondering, for many years, the significance of maintaining personal health without reaching any definite consensus. A popular belief is that personal health only serves the good of the community. As I see it，optimizing personal health could not only benefit the society，but importantly，conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity.

【解析】：

1. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. 健康對于每個人，如同花香對于花朵。

2. a popular belief is that 一種流行的觀點就是

3. optimizing personal health v 完善個人健康

4. conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity v有助于個人生活，家庭和睦，事業(yè)輝煌

{二段}：為何保持健康是盡到了社會責(zé)任

Indeed, I have to concede that keeping fit could be of great benefits for a nation and therefore be deemed as the personal obligation to the community. In other words, As for the country，the increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. Also, health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. It is conceivable that the increase of healthy social citizens can help create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further prosperity of a nation.

【解析】：

1. could be of great benefits for a nation v對于國家有利好

2. The increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. 健康公民的增加會減少社會公共醫(yī)療的消耗。

3. Health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. 健康意味著健良好的心態(tài)和充沛的體能。

4. create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further development of a nation v 創(chuàng)造巨大的價值，為國家的發(fā)展注入新鮮活力。

{三段}：為何保持健康對于個人有利好

Nevertheless，every individual could become the beneficiary of keeping fit too. First, a man with sound physique and mentality succeed better at work，respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. Secondly, health could, to a large extent, enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. For example, many entrepreneurs or super stars usually suffer from various health-related problems due to excessive workload and huge mental pressure. It is conceivable that ones poor health condition will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members. Last, remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study.

【解析】：

1. Every individual could become the beneficiary of　　人人都可以成為的受益者

2. A man with sound physique and mentality people succeed better at work，respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. 身心健康者工作更有成效，積極應(yīng)對壓力，較少沮喪，可以實現(xiàn)更多個人目標(biāo)。

3.enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically.使人精力充沛地應(yīng)對事業(yè)的挑戰(zhàn)，以及樂觀地實現(xiàn)家庭的和諧。

4.will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members不可避免地給健康帶來巨大的痛苦

5. Remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study. 保持健康使人恢復(fù)體能，清醒頭腦，因此，提高工作和學(xué)習(xí)的效率。

尾段：再次亮明觀點：

In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. Therefore, embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us.

【解析】：

1. Keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. 保持健康，不僅僅是和社會責(zé)任相關(guān)，同時，于個人幸福相關(guān)，而后者，意義更加重要。

2. Embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us. 培養(yǎng)健康的生活方式應(yīng)該每個人應(yīng)該堅持的終生的習(xí)慣。

【全文點評】：

本篇個性開篇，主題明確、邏輯清晰、細(xì)節(jié)飽滿、詞匯豐富、句型簡潔，符合雅思寫作評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，可為考生研讀賞析之佳作，建議童鞋打造屬于自己的原創(chuàng)范文。

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