雅思寫作范文匯總一次成功的復議

雅思寫作范文匯總一次成功的復議，很多同學對于這個問題有疑問和不解，那么下面就跟著中國教育在線的小編詳細了解一下吧。

本文來自雅思作文網liuxue86.com《一次成功的復議》。

我的寫作成績值得復議嗎?

賴老師,

您好. 我是您108期周末班的龔雪媚. 在您批改的作文中大多得6+, 您對我的評語就是英語表達超6,組織得好就能拿7的那位同學.

我在9月23日參加的考試,寫作居然只有5分.那次的大作文寫的是"越來越多的人開私家車,說說優(yōu)點和缺點".我是這樣寫的:

優(yōu)點:私家車能繁榮經濟, 特別是汽車工業(yè).

方便, 能隨時隨地到任何地方,不用象公交車一樣限定線路和時間.

舒適, 不用擠公交車.

缺點:令道路更堵塞,特別是上下班高峰期.

汽油供應短缺,很多私家車需要排隊加油(以廣州為例)

造成更多的環(huán)境污染.

結尾: 認為開私家車的缺點大于優(yōu)點.

考完出來自我感覺良好, 不知是否我這樣寫離題了才得個5分, 還請賴老師指點.

我這樣寫可以拿6分嗎? 我想申請成績復議, 值得這樣做嗎?

賴老師回復:

yes,i think u'd better go for an application of reevaluating. anyway, i’ll still need to tell u some mistakes u made.

now let me try to simulate how the examiner was looking at your task2 n then drew such a stupid conclusion.

the first idea(advantage) is not based on comparison and contrast----more private cars help boom the car manufacturing industryà not a right idea. but the second one hits the point---convenience. how about the drawbacks? traffic jams caused---hmmmm..good idea. more pollution is created---good too. but queue to fill up tanks with gasoline----hmmmm...u might not express it in a coherent way.

after all, u included one good point for the positive side n one for the negative side. i believe u definitely deserve a chance to get band 6. the examiner probably only read the first bit of the advantages n then turned to briefly examine the last part and hence marked your paper like this. if u apply for reassessing, the entire paper( two tasks) will be scrutinized by another examiner, n the good points will not be missed. this is why i tend to encourage u to have a try.

if unclear, call me .

good luck! Andrew

學生最后來郵

I'm glad to tell you that my writing is re-marked as band 6. Thank you very much for the encouragement, otherwise I may lose the confidence to apply the remark.

(由廣州仲愷雅思培訓中心賴勁松老師提供)

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