托?？荚囎魑脑u分標準
2024-04-02 15:21:59 來源：中國教育在線
現(xiàn)在留學(xué)的學(xué)生越來越多，留學(xué)可以開闊眼界，也能學(xué)習(xí)不一樣的教育體制，而且國外名校眾多，教育水平也一流。下面小編就來和大家說說“托?？荚囎魑脑u分標準”這個問題
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
這是一道很典型的托福獨立寫作題。在這道題后面，OG列出了如下一段話，這段話是出卷人寫給考官的，告訴考官考生可能會怎么寫，應(yīng)該怎么改。
This topic supports a variety of approaches. Some writers disagree with the statement and describe instances where to them it is appropriate to lie; typically these include white lies, lies to avoid hurting others, and lies in a business context (which often have more to do with not disclosing proprietary information than with outright lying)。 Others take the position that lies be get more lies and undermine trust. These writers present examples that support the statement. Still others look at both sides of the issue, often delineating or classifying situations where they consider lying appropriate and others where they consider lying inappropriate or more consequential. The telling of stories—real and hypothetical—is not inappropriate; it is reasonable to illustrate one's ideas on this topic with examples.
通過上述的段落，我們得出兩個信息：獨立寫作可以寫中立;獨立寫作中，可以用具體的例子來寫，哪怕是編造的例子都可以。
在OG的213頁和212頁中，分別有以下兩篇文章。讀者們可以在不看到分數(shù)的情況下，先讀以下兩篇文章，看看到底哪篇好。
(第一篇)
Some people believe that it is one of the most important value in many relationships to tell the truth all the time. However, it cannot be always the best choice to tell the truth in many situatioins. Sometimes white lies are indispensible to keep relationships more lively and dilightly. There are some examples to support this idea.
Firstly, in the relationships between lovers, it is often essential to compliment their lovers on their appearance and their behavior. Even though they do not think that their boyfriend or girlfriend looks good on their new shoe s and new clothes, it will probably diss them by telling the truth. On the other hand, little compliments will make them confident and happy making their relationship more tight.
Secondly, parents need to encourage their children by telling lies. Even if they are doing bad work on studying or exercising, telling the truth will hurt their hearts. What they need is a little encouraging words instead of truthful words.
Thirdly, for some patients telling them their current state of their desease will probably desperate them. It is accepted publically not to let the patients know the truth. They may be able to have hope to overcome their desease without knowing the truth.
In conclusion, it is not always better to tell the truth than lies. Some lies are acceptable in terms of making people's life more profusely. Not everybody has to know the truth, and it will lead them more happier not knowing it. In these cases, white lies are worth to be regarded as a virtue of people's relationships.
(第二篇)
Always telling the truth in any relationship is really the most important consideration for many reasons. I could say that when you lie to someone, this person will not trust you anymore and what is a relationship based on? Trust, confidence, so the sense of relationship is being lost. Another point is that if the true is omitted once, it will surely appear sometime, somewhere and probably in the most unexpected way, causing lots of problems for the ones involved. So, the truth is the basis for everything.
First, confidence is the most important aspect of a friendship or a marriage, or anything like that, so, once it is lost, the whole thing goes down in a way that no one can bear it. To avoid losing confidence, there is only one way, telling the truth, lying will just help throwing it away. For example, a couple decided to go out on the weekend, but the man has a party to go with his friends to where he can not take his girlfriend and then he lies to her saying that he is sick and can not go to the date. She undertands him and they do not see each other in that weekend, but he goes to the party and has much fun. Suppose on monday, the girl talks to a friend that saw him at the party and asked why did not she go with him. She found out the true and all confidence was lost, the basis for their relation is now gone and what happens next is that they break up or if they do not, he will persist on lyes and someday it will end.
What happened to this couple is very common around here and many relationships, even friends and marriages end because of something like that. Some may argue that lying once or another will not interfere anything an d it is part of a relation, but I strongly disagree, the most important thing is the true, even if it is to determine the end of a relation, it must be told. There are more chances to end something lying than saying what really happened.
初看這兩篇文章，會有相當(dāng)比例的讀者會認為第一篇好，原因是五段式，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，而第二篇只有3個段落，不合常規(guī)。但是，翻看OG的212頁和213頁，可以看到第一篇的原始分是3分，也就是Fair檔，而第二篇的原始分是4分，可以上到Good檔。
那第一篇很多人認為寫得好，為什么分數(shù)那么低呢，托?？荚囎魑脑u分標準到底是怎么樣的呢?原因就在于論證展開不充分，雖然中間有3個段落，但是每個段落，尤其是文章的第3、4段，像蜻蜓點水般點過，一點都不具體。導(dǎo)致整篇文章只有264個單詞，字數(shù)不夠。反觀第二篇，首先不是中國考生常寫的5段式作文，中間只有1個段落，很明顯第二段的第一個單詞First都是多余的。但是為什么可以上到4分呢?在文章中，作者用了一個很具體的例子來支持展開。但是，這個例子本身是編造的，而且是有漏洞的。
細心的讀者可以從“Suppose on monday, the girl talks to a friend that saw him at the party and asked why did not she go with him”這句話中找到邏輯的混亂和硬傷。本來這個Party就是不能帶女朋友去的，那為什么男朋友的朋友還會問“你為什么不去”這樣的話?這個思路上的混亂和前后矛盾太明顯了。但是，這樣的文章都可以拿4分，原因何在?論證充分具體，語言錯誤少。
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